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Wistfully taunting, it echoes your pulse—like so,
tinnitus stretches walls solid as drums, and you
bury your laughter with lilies on frost-bit toes.

Drawing her likeness on old mugs does naught in lieu
of glass jars holding it pressed on your blue cheek and
would that these ribbons and paper could hold it too.

So I am hanging her scarves like a Neverland
circling the tree, faint with eggnog and cinnamon,
hoping warm carols remember her clapping hands.

Scattering sugar on counters, I tap the thump-
thump
of her twinkling eyes, and inside it is
snowing, bright white like her hair in a make-shift bun.

The box is empty but, love, lift it, hugging this
warmth to your heart like a conch pulls her ocean near,
beating in rhythm with every smile. Do not miss

Her voice against your closed eyelids stealing your tears—
Holiday memories always weather the years.
OH NOES. SHE DEAD.

Breakdown</u>:

terza rima - reference to the three wise kings, and because I am too lazy to seek out a more challenging form

alexandrine - twelve days of Christmas, and because someone challenged me to do it

dactylic tetrameter - just kind of happened (actually, it was pretty obnoxious but decidedly less so than iambs)

In defense of my somewhat bland rhymes: pyrrhics are hard to rhyme, yo.
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Elmara Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2010  Student Writer
that is EPIC :faint:

each line, each stanza brims with such evocative detail. God, I would happily part with a limb to be able to write in so structured yet fluid a manner. Kudos!
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poshlost Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much for reading. How have you been?
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Elmara Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2010  Student Writer
You're welcome! I've been alright, been away from dA for a while because of exams. I hope you're well :)
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poshlost Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I am. How did the exams go?
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Elmara Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2010  Student Writer
Can't say, man, i'm just praying very, very fervently that i'll pass everything ^^;
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poshlost Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Good luck. You're in medical school right?
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Elmara Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2010  Student Writer
thank you! yup :D
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wonderfulrachel Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2009
This is my favourite piece of yours. And for good reason too - like the first line, this piece is "wistfully taunting", with enough abstract imagery to entice, but not so much that the meaning is befuddled and frustrating.

phrases like "lillies on frost-bit toes" and comparitives like "like a conch pulls her ocean near" pull at the heartstrings, as does the following line:

"Her voice against your closed eyelids stealing your tears"

That line is possibly my favourite - the image is absolutely heart-warming, gorgeous, and sentimental without being contrived. That said, the first stanza is my favourite stanza, because of the naught in lieu/hold it too rhyme, which is stellar.

oh, screw it.
I love it all.
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poshlost Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, thank you. You are amazing.

J.
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PerpetuallyLuminous Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2009
That was quite lovely. Where did you come with the idea for this? It has the feel of a piece that came from someone with a great wisdom
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